开始模仿写夏树风格的英文诗了，求点评

You
I know winds they always blow
I learn streams they always flow
I see suns they always glow
But to understand you?
I have no clues/
So I became a bird that flies high
So I became a boat that sails slight
So I became a grass that feels alive
Your sky, your sea, your sunlight/
Still
can't see through your eyes
Glad
as part of your life